Some people view teenage conflict with their parents is a necessary part of growing up. Whilst others see it as something negative which should be avoided. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is ubiquitous to see young adults often arguing with their parents. Many doctors say that these are signs of adolescence. Though few people believe, these conflicts are
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part of growing up while some people think
otherwise
. In
this
essay, we will discuss both the perspectives and give an opinion on whether these conflicts are necessary or not. There are many cases where both parents and teenage children complain about each other in one way or other,
thus
, making
this
a universal problem.
For example
, I have noticed children having conflicts with their parent mainly on privacy and career choices.
Similarly
, parents restrict their kid's freedom of choice by interfering and forcing their opinion.
However
, these type of issues can be resolved by encouraging healthy conversation between parents and youngsters. In
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ontrary, very few parents think, small fights with the children are important as it helps the teenage kids to face the real world better.
For instance
, some research confirms that conflicts can help kids to accept failures and improves their personality. At the same time, there should be a check on the seriousness of the conflict, so that it will not have an adverse effect on children's mentality. In my opinion, healthy arguments can help parents and young adults to understand each other better while tasting all flavour of emotions.
Furthermore
, it can improve bonding and acceptance.
Although
, both should learn to maintain a positive balance.
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