Some people would say that parents should pay their children for small home duties (cleaning, washing dishes). Other would disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There
two
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are two
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different approaches to the upbringing of
children
. On one side are those who believe that
children
should be paid for doing domestic chores,
while
others disagree. In
this
essay, I will consider both sides of the argument and
then
give my own opinion on the matter. On the one hand, the idea
to give
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money
to youngsters might look appealing because it would encourage
children
to clean and do house duties.
As well as
this
, they would earn their own pocket
money
and learn an important lesson
of
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the value of labour.
For instance
, my younger brother hates to clean up his own room, and at the same time, he always needs some extra
money
to spend on cinema, food courts, etc. In
this
kind of
cases
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, earning
money
for house chores would be an extra stimulation to do it.
However
, it is possible to make the opposite case.
This
is because many parents would argue that paying
children
for small tasks
such
as washing dishes leads to spoiling the youth.
This
way they might start to act as if parents have to give them
money
for good behaviour
otherwise
they can do whatever they want. Meanwhile, the main task of upbringing is to bring up responsible, diligent, and tidy people. They should not wait for an award for just regular daily tasks
such
as cleaning the floor or washing their own things. In conclusion, both sides of the argument have their own merits, on balance,
however
, I think that parents should give pocket
money
to the youngsters but not as a payment for the household chores.
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task response
Ensure that each body paragraph clearly supports the opinion given in the introduction. Make sure to fully address both views and conclude with a strong opinion.
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The essay is well-organized and cohesive with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Use transition words to improve the coherence between ideas and paragraphs.
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