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The chart illustrates the
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 of underground train passengers in London. Overall, the passengers' count
vary
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 from time to time. At 8.00 am, the numbers of commuters are at the
top most
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topmost
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 position, whereas at 6.00 am and 4.00
pm
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, minimum
number
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 of travellers are observed. Categorically, between 6am to 2pm timeframe, only 100 passengers travel at 6 am. The
number
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 increases suddenly at 8.00 am and it is 400 commuters at that time. After that, a steady decline is observed and around 10.00 am
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 almost 180 passengers commute. A steady increase is observed at 12.00
pm
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 with approximately 270 passengers and that count gradually increases and at 2.00
pm
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, 300 passengers use underground stations. Moving on to the
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 part, between 3
pm
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 to 10
pm
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, the
number
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 of passengers
also
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 vary. A sudden dip is observed at 4.00
pm
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 with almost 100 passengers and after that
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a sudden increase is noticed and at 6.00
pm
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, almost 380 passengers use underground train services. After that, again a sudden fall is observed and at 8
pm
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 only around 120 passengers can be found in underground stations. After that, a slight increase and decrease in passengers' count
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 observed and stations close for that day at 10.00
pm
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 with around 140 passengers.
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