Due to the rapid development and expansion of supermarkets in some countries many small, local businesses are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local businesses will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays ever-increasing in growth and diversification of supermarkets in several countries had led regional businesses on verge of extinction which will lead to shut down of their businesses and will indirectly affect
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ay-to-day life of localities, as per few individuals view. I totally agree with
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systems provided by these market chains is the major reason for its reliability. These supermarkets are in contract with
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software which can be easily accessible by the general public. It is convenient for each and every individual to download that worldwide platforms and receive the products in one touch from their home with free delivery as an additional advantage.
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, D-Mart is providing the products at reasonable prices with lucrative discounts were local shop vendors are unable to compete.
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, many of the local vendors
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aily sale of their products. Perishable products which are left unsold gets expired if surrounding conditions are not satisfactory. They will not be able to
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the losses incurred on them due to
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who solely pivot on these petty shops will go bankrupt. Families and the children will not have any future and opportunity for growth will
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ownfall of economic rate and the death rate will increase rapidly.
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hopkeeper, 3 meals a day for his family will be a doubtful situation. Recapitulating all the above points, it is evident that though supermarkets will create lots of job opportunities among youths but it will end up toppling situation of locals and their dependents. I completely opine on the same as
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will indirectly affect per capita income of the nation and the development of the society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rapid expansion
  • compete
  • closure
  • death
  • local communities
  • wider range of products
  • convenience
  • unique character
  • personalized customer service
  • unemployment
  • job opportunities
  • traditional skills
  • craftsmanship
  • support
  • local economy
  • decline
  • community spirit
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