"Prevention is better than cure”. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extent do you agree.

It is often believed that
instead
of spending on treating the diseases, it is wise to take care of yourself from various
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diseases
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well said that taking precaution from various diseases is better than having a cure
treatement
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treatment
from the diseases. I completely agree with
this
as it wastage of money on spending curing in the hospitals. I will elaborate my views in
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To begin
with, due to pollution, unhealthy diet and natural disasters, people are getting
health
problems. As human is playing with nature so as the nature in reverse giving them. For
intance
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instance
, the current
situaton
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situation
of pandemic almost half of the world population is suffering from virus infection. Most of the countries are spending enough in hospitals to cure them and
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simultaneously
on the research of its vaccine. Apart from
this
, spending so much money on COVID testing of every citizen in order to stop the community spread. But there are some people who do not care about the
prevention
guidlines
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guidelines
announce by the government and at the end suffering from the same. To continue with, it is better
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in
this
COVID-19 situation everyone must take
prevention
from
this
viral infection.
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Instead
paying in hospitals, it is better to stay at home, follow the governments pandemic guidelines, do not go outside
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unnecessarily
, maintain the social distancing. By
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it would not only save the money but
also
the precious time of people.
However
,
prevention
is impacting the business and education, but
health
and family
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all of
this
. So
prevention
saves the
health
and wealth of the citizens. To conclude,
inspite
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in spite
of playing with the
health
it is better to take care of the body. As it is rightly said, "Healthy mind in a healthy body." So keep
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istance from all these diseases by taking
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healthy diet.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preventive care
  • prevalence
  • healthcare budgets
  • public health campaigns
  • healthy lifestyles
  • long-term benefits
  • early detection
  • intervention
  • severe stages
  • accessibility
  • public compliance
  • unpredictability
  • ethical considerations
  • resource allocation
  • lifestyle diseases
  • mitigate
  • global disparities
  • high-income countries
  • low-income countries
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