Countries with long average working hours are economically more successful than those countries which do not work long hours. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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orld is changing a lot as compared to the past. Due to
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people are living
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ery hectic life. To solve
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fixed their average working hours and holidays to support their population and
economy
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eally good way to increase
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ountry's progress in
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adiant way. In the following paragraphs, I have some strong arguments to support my view. Commencing with, sometimes people think that working more time is really good for
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development. In some points
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they are not totally wrong. Even it is not only one way to improve
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conomy. In most of
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nglish speaking nations working hours are limited and still
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their
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is very progressive.
Firstly
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ssential part of
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ountry's
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, foreign investment is another main
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successful
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ation. As per 2016 oxford university report, some part of the world are working limited hours and they are more economically stable than others.
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most of the time people are doing their work. Due to
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they are suffering from the various health problems and they are not able to enjoy properly with their family. Mainly, long working hours country can't grow
rapidely
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rapidly
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ob. When people work
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much
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they can't give their 100% effort and it is scientifically proven that. To conclude, high job hours countries are excellent
economy
than other nations is totally wrong and I have fully agreed with it. Because there is no direct connection between working hours and successful
economy
.
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