A hundred years ago, people think that human race is steadily improving in every areas of life. Now if seems this is not certain in that situation. In which areas do you think we have made important progress nowadays? ln which areas do you think we still need to make progress?

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uman community is prospering in every field they land their feet with respect to

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ast century.Nowadays,there is a contradicting opinion that we are lagging in some areas ,which needs to be given

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ocus for the development to be carried out in that particular field.

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essay discusses the specific field where we are progressing well and the area there is certain attention needed .

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with, Telecommunication played a major part in our lives and we

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a lot of improvement in the current situation.These advancement connects people from Far-flung community and creates a close bond with their urban relationship which ameliorates the feeling of isolation.

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,the video-conferencing application like Zoom and skype are extremely helpful for these people to socialise.

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,the students from these rural areas can connect with online tutors using these applications to gain knowledge.

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the role of technological progression in

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industry is paramount for the society. Turning to the part that lacks the developmental

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people.

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the rural areas and there is a low level of growth in these parts of a nation. To illustrate,the basic needs

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as education,healthcare and food are not fulfilled because multispeciality

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schools

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to satisfy their needs.

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clearly shows the resources are not equally shared between the city and the country dwellers. In conclusion,the global level improvement in

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requirements of the rural community are not addressed properly in which consideration should be given more in these regions.

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