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A hundred years ago, people think that human race is steadily improving in every areas of life. Now if seems this is not certain in that situation. In which areas do you think we have made important progress nowadays? ln which areas do you think we still need to make progress?

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uman community is prospering in every field they land their feet with respect to
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ast century.Nowadays,there is a contradicting opinion that we are lagging in some areas ,which needs to be given
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ocus for the development to be carried out in that particular field.
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To begin
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 a lot of improvement in the current situation.These advancement connects people from Far-flung community and creates a close bond with their urban relationship which ameliorates the feeling of isolation.
For instance
,the video-conferencing application like Zoom and skype are extremely helpful for these people to socialise.
Furthermore
,the students from these rural areas can connect with online tutors using these applications to gain knowledge.
Thus
 the role of technological progression in
this
 industry is paramount for the society. Turning to the part that lacks the developmental
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 are the less number of basic amenities provided for the
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 people.
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the rural areas and there is a low level of growth in these parts of a nation. To illustrate,the basic needs
such
 as education,healthcare and food are not fulfilled because multispeciality
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hospitals
,international
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schools
 and departmental
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store
stores
 are located in suburban areas.If any
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requirement
,the people have to commute for
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 to satisfy their needs.
Therefore
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 clearly shows the resources are not equally shared between the city and the country dwellers. In conclusion,the global level improvement in
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communication
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industry
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However
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specific
 requirements of the rural community are not addressed properly in which consideration should be given more in these regions.
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