The movement of people from agricultural areas to cities can cause serious problems in both places. What are the serious problems and what measures can be take to solve the problems?

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World populations tend to move from rural to urban
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causes various issues for both rural and urban areas. I think that
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overnment should take measures to tackle these problems.  Rapid urbanization poses a big challenge on
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ublic resources of the cites. With the
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number of people living in the cities, there is
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ontinuous shortage of houses, particularly in the urban
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with a high density of population.
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, Hong Kong is one of the most famous metropolises in the world, and the price of the housing is
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to afford by ordinary dwellers who would have to squeeze themselves in tight spaces lower than average level. Dense populations
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eavy burden on public traffic. It
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serious traffic congestion, especially in the rush hour. 
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, urbanization would harm the economy in rural areas dramatically. The decrease of
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ural population affects local industries,
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as agriculture, fisheries and forestry. If the youngsters in these regions are more likely to live in the cities and find jobs there, it would lead to a shortage of workforce
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and hinder the
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ocal economy.
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, in China, there are only old people and children left in some villages of
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rural areas. The
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should act to solve these problems. For cities, governments should build sustainable and environment-friendly cities. It means that governments should regulate industries to ensure
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ustainable way of
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as waste dispose
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clean energy use, low-carbon emission in traffic.
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overnment should improve the infrastructure like healthcare, housing and education. For rural areas, governments should give financial support for younger generations to use their technologies to traditional industries, and it would boost the
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ocal economy. In conclusion, urbanization would be a tendency of modern society which would create new problems for both rural and urban areas, and
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agree that
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should act efficiently to guarantee the healthy
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for both areas.
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