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Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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Nowadays, almost all foodstuffs are exported.
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 it is difficult to produce all the
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 items locally due to weather conditions
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 local production gives the boost to the agricultural sector and
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verall growth of the economy. In my opinion, eating local
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 is a better option as compared to exporting eateries. The greatest advantage of consuming items that are manufactured or produced locally is that it encourages the
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 sector to grow more and more plants and trees which benefits
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nature in many prospective.
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ncrease in the number of trees may reduce the level of pollution leading people to breathe in
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resh air and reducing the chances of numerous health hazards caused by the intake of carbon dioxide. The other benefit of eating local
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 item is that it improves the financial conditions of the local manufacturers which in turn leads to the growth of the
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 as a whole. The GDP of a
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 will improve with the increase in the income levels of the people belonging to the agricultural sector.
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, there are multiple challenges faced while producing
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 not suitable in a particular weather type. A
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 with huge rainfall may unable to produce items which
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 more sunlight and usage of artificial techniques may lead to serious environmental issues The other disadvantage may be the wastage of valuable resources on the production of those items which are not possible leading to the downfall of the economy.
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 may face huge financial losses if it concentrates on growing
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 that may be inappropriate for it to produce due to lack of skills. To conclude, The benefits of eating
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 locally produced helps the economy and the environment as a whole and
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 outweighs the disadvantage of exporting.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • transportation
  • environmentally friendly
  • economically beneficial
  • local farmers
  • local economy
  • fresher
  • nutritious
  • food security
  • imports
  • preserving
  • traditional farming practices
  • biodiversity
  • limited variety
  • availability
  • cost
  • contributor
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