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Some people say that modern innovations bring a lot problems than benefits. Do you agree or disagree ?

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There are several inventions
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 as mobile phones,laptops,computers,which has revolutionized the life of people.It is said by some individuals that these innovations have totally changed the lifestyle of people.In my perspective,
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 kind of innovations have positive as well as
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negative impact on the life of individuals and viewpoints on
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 benefit is that it has made the life of people convenient and fast.
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,mobile phones have entirely changed the living style of individuals because they can do chatting ,video calls which were not possible in ancient time because of limited sources of communication.Another advantage is that some of the innovations have reduced the working hours of all the individuals .To illustrate, computers have made the calculations easier and faster.
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, there are various drawbacks of
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,computers are used by children for playing games which are adversely affecting the lifestyle of children because they are facing the problem of obesity .
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,people are becoming an addict to mobile phones they can not live without them and it is becoming their lifeline.To illustrate, a survey was conducted in all the developed and developing countries and its result was that seventy per cent people like to use mobile phones everywhere. To recapitulate, I would like to write that it has pros as well as cons,so individuals should choose smartly before using any equipment.
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