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People doing dangerous sports activities like scuba diving and bungee jumping should be responsible for their own life and rescue workers should not risk their lives to save people doing those sports.do you agree or disagree?

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ives of ones doing injury-causing sports, or the people performing these hobbies should be responsible has been a topic of debate for many decades. In my opinion, I believe
rescue
 forces should treat every human being the same, regardless of what activity they are doing, they should save lives, because every life matters and they are trained to do so.
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, the main reason why rescuers should help the people performing dangerous acts is
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 savers take an oath to serve the ones in need. A prime example, when holidaymakers tend to go
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 deep waters and do extreme sports
such
 as flyboarding, they do not want to die, but if they are in that situation, someone should be there to help them.
Furthermore
, firefighters, lifeguards and other
rescue
 teams are all trained to save lives. Take the Sagres, Portugal as an example, thousands travel to the small town to surf in high tide waves in the month of April. The Portuguese authorities created a special
rescue
 force, prepped to save lives of people surfing in that area, as the seawater can get dangerous. Most people enjoy dangerous sports,
however
,they do not want to lose their lives while doing
such
 activities, for
this
 reason,
rescue
 teams should risk their lives to save the people.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inherent risk
  • assume full responsibility
  • acknowledging
  • engagement
  • unduly
  • voluntary risks
  • extreme sports enthusiasts
  • strict safety protocols
  • mandatory training
  • mitigate
  • thrill
  • personal satisfaction
  • endangering
  • rescue personnel
  • drain public resources
  • divert emergency services
  • critical interventions
  • personal accountability
  • consequences
  • moral and practical burden
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