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It is argued by some individuals that children should have knowledge of all subjects, while other opines that juveniles should focus on those subjects which they fine most interesting. These essay will inclined more towards importance of all subjects and will also disscuss both view points followed by reasoned conclusion.

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ebatable issue that whether minors should choose subjects of their own interest or they will have gain knowledge of all other subjects. Nowadays, the trend of having broad knowledge in all course subjects is exponentially increasing in the globe.
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 understanding about all course subjects they are likely to get more job opportunities in future due to a broad understanding of different aspects of life. To illustrate, a recent research study by Harvard University on IQ level of all
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 holder juveniles and specific
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, children studying all courses have more than 60% of IQ level than only interesting
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 chosen children.
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, it depends on the capabilities of children to grasp the material. Moving
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, creativity and perfection come to those who select the
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 of their own interest but in
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 modern world knowledge in just one aspect of studies is not enough to move forward.
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 of interacting with other children if minors just sitting alone and doing their work privately will impact them negatively. To conclude, I discussed both viewpoints but my most of the reasons are on the side of positive effects of studying all subjects because in the future being a smart person people have to be pro in each and every part.
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