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Some children find some particular school subjects difficult (for example maths or philosophy), so these subjects should be optional rather than compulsory. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Few children find some
school
 subjects harder to comprehend so there is thought for discussion whether it would be better if these subjects were made optional.
This
 essay disagrees with
this
 thought and will show why all of the basic subjects should be compulsory
till
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 senior
school
 level.
A basic
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knowledge
 of all subjects is important and
also
 the children need to have
this
knowledge
 to be able to make informed decisions regarding their future. Basic subjects in
school
 are Science, Maths, English, Hindi and Social Studies. English and Hindi being language subjects are no doubt very essential for a
child
 to develop conversational skills. The other subjects
also
 make a
child
 aware
about
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 different aspects which are useful later on.
For example
, learning multiplication in mathematics helps you calculate numbers and can help you verify a bill as sometimes you may not have a calculator or computer available. Children have an impressionable mind at
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oung age and they may not be in a position to make the right decision for them as they may be following in a friend’s footsteps. Once a
child
 has
knowledge
 and exposure to all the subjects, they would be in a better position to pursue the subject that they are interested in. Alongside the theory in these subjects, a
child
 is
also
 typically required to do practical exercises which invoke creativity and thoughtfulness. In conclusion,
school
 subjects should be compulsory
till
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 the senior
school
 level. It is important to acquire
knowledge
 of all the basic subjects and that would
also
 help children in making better decisions regarding their future.
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