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International travel is cheaper and more convenient than ever. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#travel #outweigh
With the technological advancement in transportation, there has been a trend that people
travel
 aboard increasingly convenient and affordable. From
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ersonal perspective,
this
 tend does exert positive effects on our lives. There are several benefits if people
travel
 aboard.
Firstly
, international
travel
 could provide people with real experience that may be distinct to each individual.
For example
, some people tend to spend their time on famous and beautiful places,
such
 as historical heritages. Others would love to explore significant cultures by reserving time for doing some agriculture or quietly seeing crowded streets in other countries.
Secondly
, people can directly eat different kinds of delicious food when they are in foreign countries and buy some craft gifts which represent
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pecific culture. These activities enable them to deeply experience the
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 style of local inhabitants.
Furthermore
, youngsters who going aboard may interact with indigenous people, which would help them learn a new language or do some research.
However
, international
travel
 is not without any disadvantages. The most obvious drawback is
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personal security. In some European countries,
such
 as France and Italy, there are many thieves stealing money and some electronics, especially aiming
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 tourists. Another minor problem is the jet-leg. Some people may suffer from sleep-disturbance for several nights because of the jet-leg. But
this
 issue is not very common and can be remitted by a few medicines or even a little alcohol. In the light
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the above discussion, international
travel
 can broaden our horizon and make our lives more interesting. Some people who often
travel
 aboard are more knowledgeable and tolerant. I strongly believe that the merits of international
travel
 outweigh the demerits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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