With the access to the internet and social media websites, Many students are exposed to a number of dangerous situation. Adults should thus limit access to the internet for their children. Do you disagree?

It is true that with access to the world wide web, many students are exposed to various circumstances.
Hence
, I completely agree with the suggestion that the usage of cyberspace should be under the supervision of grown-ups only.
Firstly
this
essay will look at how vulnerable are children online to threats and fake identities,
secondly
, I will explain the effect of the
internet
on mental health and academics of student and
lastly
, I will give suggestions about what should be allowed for children to access.
Firstly
, the anonymity provided by the
internet
has made it too easy for anybody to create fake profiles, one might argue that there are terms and conditions but, there are yet to be made foolproof. Using image editing software a person can forge any document. Almost everyone on social media would be familiar with the deadly BLUE WHALE GAME CHALLENGE, in which you get tasks assigned by an anonymous user and vulnerable children could be trapped easily. I do not advocate that everyone online is committing a crime but based on the information mentioned above, everybody can not be trusted on social media and the
internet
.
Secondly
, the
Internet
works on an algorithm that can easily be an addiction to children. Children waste their important hours' scrolling to feed of social media, playing online games.
This
ultimately results in the degradation of their academic life. They tend to deviate from their career and their future goals.
On the other hand
, there
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arious academic platform that provides very useful study videos free from primary school to graduate courses. We all know about nonprofit organization KHAN ACADEMY which has a video on all subjects from 1st standard to college. Students should be exposed to
this
kind of academic software. To conclude, because of the adverse effect of the exposure of the
internet
and social media, parents should restrict limit to the usage of cyberspace.
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