Some people think that developing countries need financial help from international organizations to continue their development. Some people argue that practical aid or advice is more useful. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Developing countries need financial
support
or practical assistance to become more
successfull
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successful
.
This
has been always a debate globally.
This
essay will analyse both the views,
however
in my opinion the decision would be subjective, based on the need of the
country
.
Firstly
, let us discuss
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the importance of the financial need of the countries development. Countries like Indonesia, Taiwan , Thailand and Vietnam predominantly located in
south east
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Asia are rich in manpower resource and fairly intellectual, despite
of
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this
strength these countries lack in
adequeate
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adequate
money to boost
thier
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their
the
economy and move their
country
in a fast phased development path.
Laterly
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, Vietnam is one of the developing
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to be mentioned, considering their geographical advantage
this
country
could be an alternate market for China but, purely lacking in financial
support
. So, International organisations especially in
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uto industry
such
as General Motors, Ford , Chrysler could invest in these countries which will
support
their
country
development by creating employment opportunities.
On the contrary
, countries located in
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iddle east is known for their wealth. Almost all developed countries globally
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a financial stake in these countries make them
more
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richer.
However
, it is
also
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undeniable fact that these countries are lagging intellectually, these countries are sourcing
intellectuall
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intellectual
support
from other countries
such
as for education, medicine and construction. It is evident that these countries clearly require
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practical assistance in major fields for the
countrie's
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country's
countries
success. To conclude, apart from the debate of financial
support
or practical assistance for a
country
it is highly significant to understand the need of the
country
to become more
sucessful
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successful
and take
thier
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their
the
country
in a developmental path.
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