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A lot of places in the world rely on tourist as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. The advantages and disadvantages of this fact.

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 has notably increased in contemporary society due to transport improvements. In
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 context, it is argued that foreign visitor could result in problems to the local they are visiting. Other claims tourists are a massive source of income to many countries, including poor ones. I strongly tend to agree with the former. From my own standpoint,
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 can provide many benefits to a country that outweigh the drawbacks. On the one hand, recent research has shown that many countries rely on
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 as their main manner to raise money. Aruba, Maldives and New Zeland are examples of countries which depend on the travel industry as the major form to maintain or increase their income. In
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 way, foreigner people are essential for their economy and there are cases of countries that grew significantly due to
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.
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, one major drawback about
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 is that it could cause deforestation in order to build several places to accommodate tourists.
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, the travel industry can be tremendously negative to animals that belong to that environment because their major goal is to attract people and they are not concerned about how destructive could be their behaviour. Tourist
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 can be careless because they are focusing on exploring and forget that sometimes even small acts can be aggressive with the fauna e flora of the country they are visiting. To sum up, as I see it, foreign visitors can be tremendously beneficial to several countries.
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, governments should have strict regulations and policies about
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. Many studies have to be made before starting to build hotels and tourists should have to maintain a minimum distance to the native animals, in
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 way, both would be protected.
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