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These days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time, either to find a job or to study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country.

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There are many people, in our contemporary society, who has decided to live in another
country
. In
this
 context, it is argued by some people that there are unbelievable chances to fail in
this
 journey due to obstacle there is necessary to overcome. Other people claim the benefits outweigh the drawbacks. I strong tend to agree with the latter. From my own standpoint, to live abroad can be a rich experience and could assist people to grow personally and professionally. On the one hand, it is possible to analyse that there are several disadvantages to living in a different
country
. When it comes to language, it is an extremely difficult factor in living abroad. Most of the time to experience another
culture
 has
this
 challenge of facing a language which is different from your mother tongue. Another concern is related to the adaptation to a new
culture
 and its costumes. To illustrate, people in certain nations wear different types of clothes, foods and habit are not the same.
On the other hand
, it is worth considering that to experience another
culture
 could open your mind and expand horizons.
Additionally
,
this
 opportunity could increase the quality of life and
also
 security.
For instance
, a person who lives in a poor
country
 and has the chance to move to a developed one could have greater education, to live in a safer place and later probably to find an excellent job. From my point of view, a wealthier
country
 can provide to a foreign person an incredible chance of developing a remarkable career.
As a result
, individuals could have access to a better quality of life,
such
 as education for their children, public health, and more. To sum up, as I see it, it is known that to live abroad is a huge challenge, especially in the beginning , but in the end
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the advantages overcome the disadvantages.
However
, it is necessary to be opened the advantages overcome the disadvantages.
However
, it is necessary to be open to
this
 new world and to expand your mind to learn and live
this
 new
culture
.
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