Nowadays, the internet and television have given ordinary people a chance to become famous. Is this a positive or negative development?

Due to
the rapid developments made in the science stream,
people
are considered out of society if they do not cope
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with modernization. In the contemporary era, modern means of mass communications have made many simpletons earn popularity overnight,
while
some deem
this
trend to be positive
other
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however
argue. I personally reckon
this
modern trend of instant fame
as
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a positive development in society. First of all, many
people
have not only got a break from their struggling life but
also
could easily reach fame.
In addition
to
this
, many small-town
people
could earn money at a very young age and have their
talent
showcased to the public.
Secondly
, owing to social platforms like
Youtube
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, Twitter,
Facebook
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many
people
can easily make
videos
on education, travelling, cuisines et cetera which not only makes
masses
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knowledgeable but
also
well aware of things
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around
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.
For example
, recently a lot of Arabic
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TV
show
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could make
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old and rare dishes available
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the masses.
On the other hand
,
due to
social networking sites,many
people
are either prone to fraud or face stress-related issues.
Due to
social trolling not only are celebs stressed but
also
have to work under pressure.
Furthermore
, there
a
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lot of cheap
videos
uploaded online which either contain wrong information or are simply a waste of time.
Although
, there are various
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and mediums to censor the content available online adult
videos
,
videos
on crime can be easily surfed.
Besides
this
,
due to
talent
shows a lot of
people
leave their education life and focus on
talent
hunt shows like Indian Idol where they prefer to follow their dream career and often fail. To illustrate, Abhijeet Savant after winning the maiden Indian Idol
talent
hunt could not fetch a job for himself
thus
ruining his life. To recapitulate, I reckon that these media platforms provide a good
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for struggling artists to showcase their
talent
to the public.
However
, they must scrutinize the material before it reaches the masses.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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