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Some people believe that governments must apply high taxes to provide good public services for everyone. Give your opinion

#people #governments #taxes #services
The table illustrates indicators of
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social
 and economic aspects for four countries in 1994. Overall, Japan for annual income and Canada for daily calories per
person
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 at the topmost positions whereas for adult literacy rate both countries are in top position. Zaire is at the
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 place in every social and economic
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. Categorically, for Canada and Japan,
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iteracy rate for adults are the same and
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 99%. Per
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annual income in Japan is the highest and
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 15,760 $US which is nearly 4,500 $US higher than Canda. Life expectancy is nearly equal for both countries whereas for daily calorie supply per
person
, Canda stands
first
 and
that is
 3326 which is nearly 500 more than Japan. Moving on to remaining countries, for Peru and Zaire, life expectancy at birth is nearly equal which is approximately 50. Zaire's annual income per
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 is only 130 $US which is the least among all
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entioned countries and
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 30$US less than Peru. For Peru,
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dult literacy rate is twice than Zaire and
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 68%. Along with that, for Zaire
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daily calorie supply per
person
 is nearly 200 less than Peru.
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