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Some people are afraid to go out for fear of being robbed on the streets. Still, there are robberies that happen I side houses. What do u think is the best things a person can do to ensure his/her own security? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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The map below illustrates the design of the
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 university as it currently looks and how it is expected to look in the future after the reconstructions. Overall, the
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 is expected to be expanded, with new facilities as well as a shop and a café. In the present, the
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 just before the reception. It has a 25 metres pool surrounded by a gym in the north
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, a seating area in the east, a changing room in the west and the reception in the south. Currently, there are two outdoor courts one on the right
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Security systems: A set of integrated devices and software designed to protect against intrusions.
  • 2. Surveillance: Continuous observation of a place or person to gather information, often for security purposes.
  • 3. Reinforce: To strengthen or support, especially with additional materials.
  • 4. Vigilant: Keeping careful watch for possible danger or difficulties.
  • 5. Deadbolt locks: A type of lock that is much stronger and provides greater security than a regular spring lock.
  • 6. Neighborhood watch: A community-based program where residents collaborate to monitor and report suspicious activities.
  • 7. Cautious behavior: Actions taken to avoid potential dangers or risks.
  • 8. Self-defense: The act of defending oneself from physical harm.
  • 9. Community initiatives: Efforts organized by a group of people living in the same area to improve their common welfare.
  • 10. Deterrence: The action of discouraging an action or event through instilling doubt or fear of the consequences.
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