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Your colleague has invited you to his farewell party. You will not be able to attend the party, write a letter to the friend. - Explain the situation, - Say why you will not be attending, - Say something about the period you have worked together and his work.

#colleague #farewell #party #friend #situation #period #work
Dear Jay, Hope
this
 letter finds you in radiant health and
best
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 of spirits. Thank you for inviting me
in
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to
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 your farewell party. I am writing to let you know that, Due to
family
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a family
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 function I'm not able to
atten
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attend
 your party. Let me explain my situation, I have my cousin's wedding
at
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 the same day
of
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as
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 your party. I'm
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biggest
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the bigest
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bigest
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 brother in our family, due to
this
 reason I'm
responsable
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responsible
 for all the
arrangement
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. Because of
this
 I already take one week off from
office
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the office
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. As a
responsable
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responsible
 family member, I must have to stay in family function. I have
awsome
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 work experience with you. Even I can't you in my entire life. Would you kindly,
accepet
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accept
 my reason of
absense
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absence
 and I wish you will achieve more
sucess
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success
 in your new job. Thank you for your consideration. Yours truly, RUSHI
Submitted by rushipatel1953 on

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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