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Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent.

#people #world
Love them or loath them, due to rapid growth of social network
sistem
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sites
 people are able to communicate
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each other
in
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 any time.
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,you can get any kind of information only by using of
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nternet without asking anyone.
This
 convenient modern life makes us feel that we are independent of others. Some people think that in
this
 modern society we are more dependent on each other,while others think that individual
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 become more independent. It is certainly true that
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a
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uman
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man
human
 can't live without society or communicate with
other individual
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another individual
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. Social network
such
 as Facebook, Instagram, Twitter has been changing our
live
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 drastically and rapidly. We feel like we are connecting with family, friends, even someone we have never met in real life.
This
 fact that we are always
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 to talk with someone is huge social pressure on us.
Furthermore
, we do not need to be met face to face anymore.
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