Some people think that the government should increase tax on unhealthy food to encourage people to start eating healthy. Do you agree or disagree?

Needless to say
that
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the
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consumption of fast
food
adversely
affecting
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the health of
a
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apply
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human
being
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beings
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. Some
people
claimed
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,
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it is essential to impose a high tax on junk
food
because it may discourage
people
from eating fast
food
. In my opinion, hefty charges can reduce the consumption rate but will not motivate them for nutritious
food
items,
and
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I
also
explain some points which strengthen my viewpoint in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
with, imposing heavy levies on fast
food
means an increase in
price
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the price
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on
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of
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commodities which directly
affect
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affects
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the middle class and poor
people
. To be more specific, junk
food
like burgers, pizzas and street foods
available
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are available
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at affordable rates at various apps like
zomato
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and
swiggy
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.
As a
result
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result,
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working
people
and students who live away from homes prefer junk
food
because they do not have enough time to prepare a meal. Eventually, if the government increase the tax on fast
food
, it will not affect the rich
people
they will continue to consume it.
On the other hand
, there
some
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are some
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other methods through which
this
problem could be solved. First is, healthy foodstuff should be more affordable and accessible so that everyone, especially
weaker
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the weaker
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section of the society can easily afford it and easily approachable for the working
people
.
Because many
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people
are aware of the ill
effect
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effects
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of unhealthy eating habits but the availability of
ready to eat
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ready-to-eat
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food
is comparatively more than healthy products.
In addition
to
this
, parents should try that children do not go
too
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to
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fast
food
shops, so for that parents have to prepare some healthy
meal
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meals
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at home.
Last
but not least, the government set the duties of some health advisors who organize camps in different areas
and
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give information about healthy and unhealthy
food
and
also
explain the harmful impacts of fast
food
. In conclusion, after analyzing all the points,
it is clear that
Imposing more tax on
food
is not only the solution because it will deter low-income groups from buying them. If the governments want to reduce the consumption of fast
food
, they should spread the awareness of self-discipline towards the eating pattern.
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coherence cohesion
Work on providing a clearer stance and more comprehensive development of the ideas in the introduction and conclusion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • unhealthy food
  • junk food
  • calorie-dense
  • taxing
  • incentivize
  • manufacturers
  • prohibitively expensive
  • disproportionately
  • low-income households
  • healthcare costs
  • obesity
  • diet-related diseases
  • punitive measures
  • lifestyle choices
  • government intervention
  • food industry
  • economic impact
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