6. Some people believe that women should be treated as equal to men when applying for a job with police or the military. Others think women are less suitable for this kind of job. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Police
and military jobs are more demanding and highly respectful jobs. It is said by some individuals that women should be given equality while applying for
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police
and military,while others believe that women are not suitable for
this
kind
of
job
.In my perspective
job
in military and
police
are very demanding,and women are less suitable for
this
kind
of environment and my viewpoints on
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topic will be elaborated in the aforementioned paragraphs.
To begin
with, the training of military and
police
is really hard and women are physically less strong as compared to men.
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, a survey was conducted in all the developed and developing countries of the world,and it had concluded that very few women are in
police
and army. It was published in an article that one woman joined the
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army
,and she was survived in war ,but her arms and hands were broken and she was raped.It is concluded that because of women’s body organs they are reluctant to join
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military.
On the other hand
, some people think that these days women are becoming stronger, and they are seen in the army,
police
,politics,so women are joining
this
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of jobs everywhere.They are capable of doing
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of
job
. To recapitulate, I would like to write that women have the proper right to join
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of jobs ,and they should be equally treated and proper respect should be given to them.
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