some people believe that international sporting events are the ideal opportunity to show the world the qualities of the host nation. Others believe that thesze events are mainly large unjustifiable expense. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no doubt that many countries are ready to organise mega sports events.
However
, it is sometimes thought
this
may not be profitable in terms of money, others, consider that
this
can bring plenty of chances to develop even
further
financialy
Correct your spelling
financially
financial
. In my opinion, I think that
this
can offer
a
Remove the article
apply
show examples
positive energy to
h
Add an article
the
a
show examples
ost country.
Firstly
, one of the main reasons why I think
this
is a golden chance to showcase the country's resources in front of other nations. During
this
function, there are a lot of
prepations
Correct your spelling
preparations
preparation
have to be made by the organiser to accommodate both sports stars as well as viewers.
This
can be done by making state - of -art- buildings and arenas, which can
be
Change the verb form
also attract
show examples
also
attract thousands of tourists globally.
For example
. Rio
olympics
Change the capitalization
Olympics
show examples
, which was witnessed the same scenario and even now they have been a hot spot of many holidaymakers.
This
happended
Correct your spelling
happened
since Brazil staged the mega event for the world.
Secondly
, When foreign investors are allured by the facilities of the host nation, they would think about investing in the country for their business. By doing
this
, they probably start some factories to make products, which, eventually, creates
n
Add an article
a
show examples
umber of jobs for local people.
This
situation, slowly,makes a strong economy and they can
flurish
Correct your spelling
flourish
as well.
For instance
, a recent study showed that whatever nations who hosted the
world renowned
Add a hyphen
world-renowned
show examples
meets, later on, they experienced
a
Remove the article
apply
show examples
significant advancement in receiving foreign investments. In conclusion, people have a different opinion on events
such
as
olympics
Change the capitalization
Olympics
Olympic
show examples
and world football, since
this
can cause
h
Add an article
a
show examples
uge financial burden to them. Despite the fact that
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
I strongly hold a view of
this
can bring more positives than any negatives.
Submitted by Sal on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: