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Stores should sell local food products and not the imported food products. Do you agree or disagree ?

#stores #food #products
Some people are of the opinion that the vendors should sell local
food
 products
instead
 of marketing imported products. Even though it gives an advantage and economical benefits to the indigenous producers, imported edibles cannot be completely taken out
from
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 stores due to its increasing popularity.
Hence
, I partially agree
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this
 notion. On the one side, several benefits to the local
food
 suppliers when their product is bought and sold in the local
market
.
Demand
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of
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 the goods in the
market
 at a tremendous rate when imported goods are reduced or completely excluded.
For instance
 in UAE 50 percentage of the fruits and vegetables are imported from Asian markets.
As a result
 of
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ountry
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 will improve the local
market
 demand and supply. Additional,
that is
 an income circulation within the country.
As a result
, it is very suitable to consider selling local
food
 products over the imported ones. The other side there is a downside to
this
 option of choosing ingrown
food
 products.
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there is a huge demand for international consumables. People are ready to spend money to get there decide items.
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if
you
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 stores choose not to keep imported consumables, the customers will go online to buy it is a very reliable and convenient option
instead
 of using the local substitute. For the more, there are certain products which can only be produced under
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ertain atmospheric condition and with the killer products.
For example
, Parmesan cheese cannot be made in every country because of the requirement of certain bacteria for optimum taste.
Hence
,it is not always viable to ignore
their
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 International products. To conclude cal dispose
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should try every possible
ways
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 to support its own local products to get into
market
 it is not always feasible to ignore the growing needs of consumers towards the foreign consumables.
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 the government should take initiatives to add the local producers
then
 shutting of the imports
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