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Some school has a restriction of use phone at school

#school #restriction #phone
Love them or loath them in
this
 modern society almost every each individual has a
phone
 even students. In most schools around the world, has certain rules about the use of their
phone
 in school to maintain to focus on their study. It is obviously hard to keep your attention to your subjects if someone is using their
phone
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lass room. Students are learning how to communicate face to face with people which is
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rucial skill in the outside of school life.
Moreover
 restricting
phone
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lassroom itself can improve
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.
This
 is simply
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because
, without these devices, they are
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ar fewer distraction in
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lassroom for teachers and students.
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