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Some people think that getting a degree from university is the best way to secure a good job. Others believe that employers value work experience more than a university degree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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At some point in their lives, all people face the challenge of entering the labour market, hoping to find a great
job
.
However
, there is an ongoing debate about what future employers look for,
university
education
 or hands-on
experience
. In my opinion, it all depends on the nature of the
job
 one aspires to. Thinking about various occupations, it becomes clear that certain jobs require a
university
degree
 in a relevant subject from anyone who wants to enter that career path.
This
 condition is clearly stated in the
job
 adverts, and for
such
 jobs
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no amount of work
experience
 can replace higher
education
. Examples of
such
 occupations are doctors and engineers. A nurse who has been working in a hospital for ten years will not become a doctor.
This
 is because these professions require highly specialised knowledge that can only be gained through many years of higher
education
.
However
, not all jobs are like that. In some industries, work
experience
 seems more valuable than a
degree
. When I worked in a bank, some of our managers, who had only secondary
education
, were promoted to top positions because they knew how the department works inside out. They clearly had an advantage over those with a master’s
degree
 who had just joined the bank. From
this
 example, it is obvious that some jobs require extensive knowledge of the business, and in
such
 cases
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employers will favour those with several years of
experience
 over fresh
university
 graduates. In conclusion, it seems there is no single path to getting a great
job
. While a
university
degree
 is a prerequisite for some jobs, work
experience
 may be more important for others. Researching the typical requirements for desired positions will help one to make the right choice.
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