People tend to work longer hours nowadays. Working long hours has a negative effect on themselves their families and the society so working hours should be restricted. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The two bar charts reveal, the consumption of calories of a person via eating daily food and beverages in the five various nations. The two diagrams reveal, the life cycle of silkworms and manufacturing stages of
silk
cloths. Overall, it can be seen that
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there are many stages involved in
this
process. In the initial stage, a female butterfly lays eggs on the leaf.
Then
, in the span of 10 days’ eggs are being hatched and baby larvae came from the eggs. After that, they started eating mulberry leaves as
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food. In between 4-5 weeks they started constructing their own cocoons. They lived in the cocoon for almost a fortnight and after that
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they have been converted into the adult butterfly. In the process of
silk
cloth, cocoons are collected and good cocoons are being selected. In the following stage, those cocoons are being boiled in a rooster.
Then
, they unwind. The length of
silk
thread is almost 300-900 meters high.
Then
,
this
silk
thread twisted and dyed. In the
last
stage,
silk
threads being weaved and
further
dyed.
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