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In some countries young people have become richer, healthier and live longer, but they are less happy. What are the causes? What can be done to address this situation?

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Nowadays, youngsters in many countries are living healthy, wealthy, and long
life
beside
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 they are happy.
This
 essay will discuss some reasons behind
this
 problem and
also
 the possible solutions. There are a number of causes that lead to
u
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nhappy feeling in young people.
Firstly
, youngsters in many countries start earning while studying .
As a result
 of
this
 experience, they get high paid jobs after finishing their studies and become rich in young age.
Secondly
, in
this
 modern world, young people are health conscious and always have balanced meals which
helps
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 them to live a healthy and longer
life
.
For instance
, a survey revealed that 80
percent
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 of youngsters in Europe are living a good healthy
life
 with financial security but are not happy. There are some possible solutions to
this
 situation, the
first
 and the foremost is young people should make some friends
to
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share their feelings as money can not buy happiness.
Moreover
, there should be
a
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healthy competition between youngsters at school because
this
 can help them to build healthy relationships and happiness. In conclusion, being rich can bring a healthy and long
life
 but it
mightalso
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might also
bring
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 a feeling of loneliness.
Therefore
 a balanced social
life
 can help to deal with
this
 problem.
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