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Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values) Describe the information below and discuss the implications for dental health.

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The figure depicts the pH
level
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 of different sources of
sugar
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 within tooth destruction is likely or unlikely occurs during 40 minutes after the substance was ingested. Overall, it is evident that the acid indicators for fruit, cane and
honey
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sugar
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 plunge after a little time, after which steadily reach the same position by the end of the period.
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,
honey
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 is the least damaging source of
sugar
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 as its pH
level
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 stabilizes swiftly.
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 the moment when three candies are eaten, each contains the exact same
level
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 of acid - at 7.
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 follows by an enormous drop to just below 5 for
honey
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, to about 4.2 for cane, and to 3 for
honey
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 sugars in
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 5 minutes, causing the decay of tooth in a mouth.
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,
honey
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 remains at the same
level
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 during the
next
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 5 minutes, following which it experiences a gradual increase until 35
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. The figure for the fruit
sugar
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also
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 augments during the following 35 minutes.
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, the pH
level
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 for cane shows a steady increase to 7 by the
last
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 40th minute.
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