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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in cities and town closing. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #cities #town
In
the
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modern society, many people
shop
 thru online and the online shopping industry growing up rapidly. Because it has many benefits.
Therefore
, some people believe that all of
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ffline shops will close because of online shopping. I disagree about
this
 perspective. Online shopping has not only a lot of benefits but
also
 has
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rawback. On one hand, you only need to click for buy something providing that you are shopping
on
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online.
This
 is one of the best benefits of online shopping. Online shopping is easier and more convenient than
offline
 shopping. You don't need to go outside
for
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 buy something. For
this
 reason, you can save your time and energy from shopping.
In addition
,
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shop
 is usually cheaper than
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ffline
shop
.
On the other hand
, you could fail the shopping
on
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online.
For instance
, if you want to buy clothes thru online, you cannot try on the clothes and you are not sure the real
colour
 and
size
 of the clothes. sometimes
colour
 and
size
 are different
with
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 real.
In contrast
, on condition that you
shop
on
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ffline store or shops, you can try on them and you can check real
colour
 and
size
. For
this
 reason, I think
offline
 shops will not close because of online shopping. In conclusion, online shopping has pros and cons.
For example
, cheaper and more convenient than
offline
 shops.
Moreover
, you can save your time if you buy something by online shops.
However
, still many people like to buy
offline
 shops. Because they know online shopping still has
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isk of fail shopping like different
colour
 or
size
.
Therefore
, I think
offline
 shops will not close because of
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growing
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 of online shopping.
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