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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in cities and town closing. Do you agree or disagree?

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In
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modern society, many people
shop
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 thru online and the online shopping industry growing up rapidly. Because it has many benefits.
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, some people believe that all of
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ffline shops will close because of online shopping. I disagree about
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rawback. On one hand, you only need to click for buy something providing that you are shopping
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online.
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 is one of the best benefits of online shopping. Online shopping is easier and more convenient than
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 shopping. You don't need to go outside
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 buy something. For
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 reason, you can save your time and energy from shopping.
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shop
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 is usually cheaper than
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ffline
shop
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.
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, you could fail the shopping
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online.
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, if you want to buy clothes thru online, you cannot try on the clothes and you are not sure the real
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 and
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 of the clothes. sometimes
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 and
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 are different
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 real.
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, on condition that you
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ffline store or shops, you can try on them and you can check real
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 and
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. For
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 reason, I think
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 shops will not close because of online shopping. In conclusion, online shopping has pros and cons.
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, cheaper and more convenient than
offline
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 shops.
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, you can save your time if you buy something by online shops.
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, still many people like to buy
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 shops. Because they know online shopping still has
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isk of fail shopping like different
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 or
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, I think
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 shops will not close because of
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growing
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 of online shopping.
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