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Some people think that cities are the best places to live. Others prefer to live in a rural area. Compare the advantages and disadvantages of living in the city to living in the countryside. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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while some people like the silence,animals,fresh air and nature from the
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 area, another one like to go in the cinema,theatre,stadium, restaurant and fast food in the
city
,so in that essaye4tq4,I am going to give my point of view about advantages and disadvantages in both situation.
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 of all, from my point of view
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the most important thing is to be happy, does not matter where you live if you love it. There are disadvantages of living in a rural area,
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 when someone from there needs a doctor or go to the hospital, they do not have a quick answer while in the
city
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minutes,
on the other hand
,people do not eat junk food in couty and they have a healthy life,they use to need to go to a doctor less than people from
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ity.
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econd disadvantage is about education, people from rural area they do not have easy access to school or extra class
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 a great problem to develop they nowaday people that connect rural space and
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 because both can be helpful to a good life
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