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some people think that when a person travels into a diffrent culture they should adopt to the local practices and customs ....to wht extent do u agree or disagree

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 contemporary era due to advancement in technology
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traveling
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 has become so facile. People can travel from
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region
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 to another
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 without any trouble. When a person goes to a new
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 he
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 the opportunity to meet new people, get to know about their traditions and practices. In my opinion, I agree that when an individual goes to a new
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 he definitely has to accustom himself with the traditions and customs of that
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.
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, when
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 arrives at a new
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 it is going to be a new
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 for him.
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, by adapting himself with the customs and traditions of that
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one
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 can make his trip memorable.
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 will be able to understand the lifestyle of local people
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,
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 will find easiness in making them friends.
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, it will give him
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pportunity to celebrate the local practices and traditions. According to a survey, 80% of the local people want those kinds of
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utsider at their
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 who is willing to learn about their way of living.
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, by getting familiar with
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onditions of a new
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one
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 will treat that
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 as his home and local ones as his family.
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 will not do any wrong during any festival. By getting used to with the traditions and practices of a
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one
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 will eliminate the possibility of offending locals sentiments. Many
travelers
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 have mentioned in their interviews, how they form of
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reat bond of friendship with the people of
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ifferent
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 just by showing respect and learning their culture and rituals In conclusion, while there are people who
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 it difficult to adapt
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the traditions and culture of a new
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,these must be
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 against the cultural and practices benefits
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. Personally, I feel that these benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
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