Many countries spend a lot of money in art. Some people think investment in art is necessary, but others say money is better spent on public services and facilities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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as soon as possible the government have to invest capital in that important culture, every rick country has to spend fund with art,

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is my opinion,

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important for human development,

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is helpful to open people mind and make

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world better, I can not imagine the life without it,

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put more colour in the life help

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we to be happy.

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, cash from the government is the most necessary to art survive at the beginner,

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after an art company make capital, they need to pay taxes to improve another kind of arts around the place.

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, it isn't the priority and the most important thing, the money could be separated looking where is necessary.

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, culture came after the education and health sector and another's things but it is

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important and necessary .

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 9.0

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Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Many countries spend a lot of money in art. Some people think investment in art is necessary, but others say money is better spent on public services and facilities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

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The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?