One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development overweight the disadvantages
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people to have the opportunity to overcome deathly diseases. Before, people who were diagnosed with cancer and Change the verb form
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, there are still some problems that for now can not be solved. Perhaps in the future, people will come out with other technologies that will fully erase any health issue.Linking Words
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