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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

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The ways that
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humanity live have been changing with the development of
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. Some people believe that
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technology
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 influences in a negative way many aspects of our lives while others said the advance of
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 has brought benefits to the population. In
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discuss
 both
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 of views and explain why I believe the advantages of
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 outweigh the disadvantages. Internet,
mobilephones
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mobile phones
 and computers are one of many examples of the development of
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 and with theses progress the population have more opportunities to access
information
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 which before was harder to find.
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, before the internet
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when
 the teacher gave homework we had to research in many books and sometimes the
information
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 was not clear, nowadays with the internet we can find easily any
information
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. Another key factor is the advance of
communication related
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with
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technology
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, some years ago a telephone call was much more expensive and the most traditional kind of communication was letters if you have been living overseas. Because of the
technology
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 at
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we maintain our relations with family and friends even if they are living in
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 county.
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, the advance of
technololy
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technology
 has brought news disadvantages which we did not have before it.
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 of all, fake news is the biggest problem that we are facing
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 moment. There are so many
information
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 about one product, or politician, or a celebrity, or about a new study
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, and it makes we fell unsure about all
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avaliable
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available
 and unsure what is the right that we should trust.
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, a new type of celebrities
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 created and they are called ‘influencers’. It has been impacting many lives, theses influencers build the
ideia
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idea
 of the perfect body, expensive items and happy life. For
instace
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instance
, if the teenager has not ready to
identific
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identify
 the difference
beteween
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between
 social media and
real life
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 he can become
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 thinking about why his life is not similar of the influencer and why it is unfear. In Conclusion, even if the fake news and the fake
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lives
life
lifes
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 which exist only on social media are the disadvantages of the
technology
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. The benefits,
such
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,
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 more
information
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avaliable
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available
 to the population along with
easily
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 means of communication outweigh the disadvantages.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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