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In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution and give your own opinion?

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Traffic congestion has become a burned issue in
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 modern era and it is said that higher
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 should be imposed to halt
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 obstacle. I think it is an unfair decision and I will discuss it's positive and negative sides in the upcoming paragraphs.
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 with, one benefit of
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 solution is that people would consider less about private vehicles as it would be exceedingly expensive if they use their car
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 of public vehicles.
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,
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 measure would encourage individuals to commute on the bus and the train.
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, environment problems would be reduced if
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 act is passed by the government and people will not face any hazard if private vehicle's number is decreased by
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 solution.
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 revenue will spend on public transport, which requires a service to be renewed. On the negative side, imposing a
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 on private vehicles could be difficult to pay for people who are under poverty and they have to use a car to reach their destination as Countryside areas have no access to public transportation.
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, people are already paying a cost on their vehicles. A worker with fewer salaries will not be able to follow
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 quick fix than rich employees so it would be an unfair
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 taxes would affect transit companies as they would earn less money if people avoid buying vehicles due to increasing
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. To conclusion,
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 can decrease traffic congestion and make public transport popular, but it
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 leads to dispute. So
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 solution has pros and cons for the public.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traffic congestion
  • Emissions
  • Revenue generation
  • Public dissatisfaction
  • Political issues
  • Financial burden
  • Environmental benefits
  • Efficiency and accessibility
  • Taxation
  • Heavily taxing
  • Private car owners
  • Fund improvements
  • Discourage the use
  • Healthier environment
  • Public transport quality
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