While people flood into big cities to seek jobs and happy life, there is a tendency for people to move out. What problems do big cities have? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

There are several individuals who decide on moving to urban parts of a country in pursuit of a promising career and happiness. While there are positive factors that motivate them for
this
move, negative aspects
such
as the high cost of living and
pollution
often
drives
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them out
off
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the city life. In major cities around the world, the cost of living is expensive. The basic
neccessities
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necessities
such
as food, shelter and daily expenses can set an individual back in monetary terms.
For instance
, in Singapore
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the average rental of
a
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apartment in the city could range from $2000 onwards.
Furthermore
, dining out and groceries are
also
exhorbitant
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exorbitant
and can be draining on an individual without
suffiecient
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sufficient
paychecks.
This
leads them to re-examine their decision
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living in the city. The levels of
pollution
are
also
prevalent in major cities. The noise
pollution
that arises from the construction of buildings and roads is known to take a toll on the populations living or working around the
vicinty
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vicinity
visit
city
.
In addition
, the
inceasing
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increasing
number of vehicles cause air
pollution
which
cause
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asthma and other
respitory
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respiratory
tract diseases.
This
consequently
drives many people to live away from the cities to escape the many health problems. While it
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attractive to live in a cosmopolitan part of the country, the stress brought on by living in it and the environmental factors
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many to rethink and relocate
thereafter
. While it is dependable on the individual on how well he can adjust on his/her environment, it is important to be happy wherever they might call home.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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