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Some people say that Ebooks and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Many people think that digital books and other
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sophisticated
 technology will
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 replace the traditional paper-based book.
This
 essay agrees with that statement.
Firstly
, it can support the go green campaign.
Secondly
, the size of
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 able to adjust, which is suitable for some people. The
first
 benefit of Ebooks is that we can
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 to go green campaign.
Firstly
, papers are made from trees. Reducing the usage of them can lessen the probability to cut many more trees.
Therefore
, we can save many forests from deforestation. Saving the forest means saving our life too. Why
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 so? when there is no forest,
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, we jeopardize the biodiversity and our food resource because
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orest is one of the important food
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 for human. Another benefit is that people with glasses can adjust the fonts. Ebooks actually provide the technology that adapts to some people with eye disorders. It can be maximised or minimised, people can choose which one is more suitable for them.
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vercome the disadvantage of paper-based form. In conclusion, I reiterate my belief that it is true that the development of
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lectronic book can destroy the traditional form of itself.
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 because of the advantages that it offers
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 more tempting and suitable for our era.
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