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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems.

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It’s a common view that
school
 has the main role in a child's education. Children spend lots of hours in
school
, learning a bunch of subjects
such
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science, maths and history, but, there’s a new trend in the
school
 environment. Teachers aren’t getting the opportunity to transmit their own beliefs, and, as far as I can tell, that's absurd. A child’s education is the responsibility of his family. In
this
 essay, I will explain why I’m saying that. Even when children are going to a public
school
 system, all the
school
 budget relies on taxes. These taxes come from
the
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population production, including the parents of these children. Parents spend a great deal of money paying for nutrition, clothing and medication, eventually. If you are following my argument, I already notice that parents are spending twice their offspring's cost of living. If our financial resources come from them, anyway, they have the leverage of educating their own kids. When
school
 educates over their duties, a dangerous situation
rises
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. Children see their teachers as authorities,
this
 way, they cannot identify exactly what is a fact and what is just a personal point of view.
Therefore
, talking with the family is a great resort to segregate what is
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true knowledge from what is an opinion. Some teachers are not able to take care
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when they are talking about religion. They may transmit their own religious beliefs in a classroom. I would say
this
 is worrisome. Religion is a matter which must be dealt in a private forum,
thus
, it’s crucial parents have the main role in questions related to that.
Finally
, in spite of the
school
's importance on educating generations of citizens, their job should focus on technical and artistic subjects. When involving the other side of education, as individual values and
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 creeds, the family has to be free to mentor their kids.
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