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Some people think that it is best to live in a horizontal city while others think of a vertical city. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

#people #city
People live in different types of cities, the structure where people live usually determine where the streets , houses , office buildings, etc. will
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some people think is best to live in a horizontal
city
 while others think of a vertical
city
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First
 of all, living in a horizontal
city
, have their pros some buildings could be across the street and there would be easier to have straight horizontal street lines and the properties who are in the ends could probably
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However
 how a
city
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, because is just change the locations of the buildings but not how the people interact with the
city
 itself.
On the other hand
, living in a vertical
city
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 could have some
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 buildings alongside the principal vertical long street , and probably the
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 could be very well placed and create an organic way of living, despite that as I said before the shep of
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the
city
 have little influence in how people live their
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lives
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.
Finally
, in my particular opinion vertical or horizontal cities have the same
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 to the citizens
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space where all the services (transport, health, education, etc) should be of great quality.
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