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many jobs used to be done at home by hand but nowadays an increasing number of them are done using machines instead. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this development

#jobs #home #hand #machines #development
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 years ago, everything is done by manually in homes especially.
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, nowadays, people are loved to live
life
 with comfort and they
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 their works with the help of machines. Uses of technology have some benefits as well as there are some
draw backs
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. In
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I will discuss both positive and negative perceptions. On the one hand, it cannot be denied, machines play
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ital role in
this
 modern world. Everyone is depending on technology and they prefer to bring appliances to their homes. Because of machines are less time consuming and it gives
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omfortable
life
.
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, we can wash a bucket of clothes at a time by using of
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ashing
machine
.
Furthermore
,
machine
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 more accurate than human beings
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 in every kitchen there
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 a lots
machine
 there like
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lender, microwave oven, juicer and these give
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ame taste as well. On the flip side, the disadvantages of uses of
machine
 for home chores, people live
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nhealthy
life style
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 because there is no manual work to do.
For instance
, people gain their weight because there is no activity in their daily
life
.
Moreover
, children can learn a lot of things with manually things done and which can be helpful in their future lives. To conclude, in modern
life
 people prefer technology for doing their tasks which is save their time.
Therefore
 uses of machinery in routine
life
 create numerous health problems.
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  • job displacement
  • skills gap
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