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Nowadays, people are spending more time away from their home because they spend longer in their workplace. discuss advantages and disadvantages.

#people #time #home #workplace
in
this
 modern era, most of
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the
eople
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people
 are preferred to
work
 long hours in their
work place
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 rather than go home and spend
time
 with their family. In
this
 essay,I will discuss both the positive
side
 and
also
 the negative
side
 of the statement. On the one hand, the main reason
of
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 every individual increased their working hours for career growth and
also
 pursue a better lifestyle like buying a new car, live in a luxury house and many more.
Furthermore
, there is another benefit for spending more
time
 in
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workplace
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ork place, people getting benefits
such
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promotions,
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overtime time
over time time
 etc
therefore
 it
also
 helps to get them their desired destinations. On the flip
side
, the negative
side
 of long working hours, people are not able to give proper
time
 their family and friends and it is affected their relationships and
also
 social life.
In addition
, stay in office for long working hours is disturb their mental and physical health.
For instance
, a survey conducted in 2012 in Japan, most people who are in their late 30's, they are patient of diabetes and heart disease because they feel depression for long office timings. To conclude, in the resent days everyone has to spend more
time
 on
work
 stations for their life change.
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