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The government should reduce the amount of money spent on local environmental problems and instead increase funding into urgent and more threatening issues such as global warming. Do you agree or disagree?

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One of the biggest challenges faced by the world is global warming, which has a detrimental consequence on the environment. In my opinion, governments must expedite their spending to curb
this
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ocal level as well, which can have a positive impact on climate change. Many studies have shown that global warming can have a
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nvironment;
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, administrations should play an indispensable role in order to control it. They ought to increase the spending on renewable energy and afforestation to reduce the CO2 emission and minimize climate change.
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ast few years have seen an exponential rise in the construction of solar power plant in India, as an alternative for coal-fired power plant. Having said that, the authorities
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 need to have local environmental policies, to eliminate the issue at the source.
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ocal council can facilitate social awareness campaign to educate people on fuel conservation in the automobile.
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, administrations can support the usage of recycling material
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 of plastic in the local market. These steps can help in tackling local environmental issues
such
 as air and water pollution while contributing
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 a reduction in global warming. To conclude, global warming is the biggest threat faced by the world and
therefore
, countries must take concrete steps to control it. At the same time, there are a number of measures that administrations can take, to improve local environmental issues.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urgent issues
  • global warming
  • local environmental problems
  • funding
  • redirecting funds
  • broader environmental health
  • financial efficiency
  • return on investment
  • cost-effective
  • holistic approach
  • moral and ethical considerations
  • resource allocation
  • long-term consequences
  • short-term impacts
  • competing environmental concerns
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