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As computers translate quickly and accurately, learning foreign language is a waste of time? To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Technology has reduced manual human efforts to a great extend. Some people think that there is no need to learn a new
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 one can translate and understand foreign speech.
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, technology can be helpful to translate thousands of pages within
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human efforts and can work anywhere. Using a
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 one can translate
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ingle script in multiple
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ew hours. As per the data collected by IBM, an online translator can reduce 80% of
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man power
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. The accuracy of online translation is 75% more than the manually performed translation.
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, due to
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vailibity of the
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technology
, there is a loss in the job demand of
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 80% employee as per the data collected by the Times of India in
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ear 2019. The
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uman.
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, a
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 text. The person can use online translator application to translate and later manual checking can be performed.
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, by learning
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 pupil will not only become multilingual but
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, it will enhance their confidence. Being a bilingual the people will
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multilangauge
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multilanguage
multi language
 speakers. To conclude, I completely disagree that pupils should stop learning a new
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online
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 to increase individual knowledge.
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