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Many countries today are expecting high level of migration from rural area to cities what are the causes of this trend, and what effects does it have on the existing city dwellers?

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In today's Morden world, people are more fascinated about migration from
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illage
area
 to megacities. As a reason, those who are lives in the
country side
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area
, they wanted to be
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etter lifestyle and graceful future of their children. In the following paragraphs, I will depict the reasons and what kinds of impact will on local people of the
city
. To commence-up, Everyone wants to live
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etter lifestyle and use
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dvancement of technologies. While living in
country sides
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, local people would have received
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eat and clean environment.
However
, they were failed to get local municipal service
such
 as - garbage cleaning, 24/7 water availability and enough street lights.
Moreover
, sometimes they faced
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hortage of Daily needs, as there
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ack of grocery stores.
Additionally
, due to the migration in
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ity, the local people from
rular
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ruler
regular
area
, they would
enjoyed
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 entertainment activities and their children will have study in
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rominent university of college which can help them to make their future in
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echy world.
However
, there might have awful influences on local people
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c
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ity
area
.
First
, they might have faced
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ommunication gap between villagers and
city
 people. What's more , villagers haven't seen
latetst
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latest
last
 technologies,
thus
, some company wouldn't
hired
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 due to the basic knowledge of
equipments
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 use.
Lastly
, In
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ural
area
, farmers could
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 the vegetables from their own farm, that help to save money, but If they moved
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c
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ity, they have to pay extra for maintenance and services. To Sum Up, Migration is
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 great move for villagers, because that can help their tomorrow's generations. Honestly, money management would be necessary and they have to keep
strive
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 to earn more and more which can help them to settle down in
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ity
area
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