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Some teachers think that international students exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students. Do you think its advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Some teachers believe that students have the opportunity to study in other countries and will develop and have more beneficial for youths. In my opinion,
this
 opportunity will give students many benefits and undoubtedly these advantages could outweigh any disadvantages.
To begin
 with, I would say that having the valuable chances to have
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ducation in a foreign country brings numerous benefits to teenagers.
First
 of all, students can independently experience their own life, away from their family which will help build their personality, resilience as well as problem-solving skills.
Secondly
,
exchange
 students can learn about different cultures and make friends from other countries that
helps
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 them have a well-experienced and a more
in depth
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 perception regarding their future path.
Furthermore
, as an international
exchange
students
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 can have a better understanding of various academic procedures and they will be educated
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how to deal with different situations in many cultures. Not only
exchange
 students get various benefits from
this
 but
also
 strengthen communication among teachers, schools and the governments.
This
 interaction will
also
 promote various new programs to help with students’ learning progress. In conclusion, I believe that international students
exchange
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 foreign countries would bring numerous benefits. The more
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 and knowledge they gain from the program, the more chance to have contact with different methods of teaching and the better they will be prepared for their future path.
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