You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: These days in many countries, fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this, and how could the problem be solved? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, there are just a few people tend to
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a teacher in some countries,
espeacially
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especially
in secondary school. In
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I will
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consider
the causes and the solutions toward
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issue. There are some reasons to cause
this
problem, like the
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monster
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parents and the lower salaries make them
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wastage
wattage
.
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, there are some parents
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their children that make some argument to the teachers, even some of them ask the teachers
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emind their children to drink water or go to
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oilet.
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schoolies in a difficult situation and
this
is one of the reasons.
Moreover
, some schoolies are not satisfied
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their salaries.
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cause the drainage of the teacher who
teach
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in secondary school.
For instance
, they prefer to advancing
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their
knowledge to get a higher qualification to optimize
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their
career which can help them gain
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higher salaries.
However
, there are some solutions to
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solve
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this
problem. The evidence is schools can promote some educational
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which
is
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relating to
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benefits of children who can take care
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themselves.
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the parents know if their children become more independent which can help them their
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development and
this
also
can reduce the
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workload on
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their
children.
In addition
,
the
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schools
also
can provide advancing training to improve the teachers' knowledge and increase their salaries. The best example is they not only can make teachers can optimize themselves but
also
can gain much more wage if they under
this
implementation. In conclusion, while being a teacher is pressure by facing monster parents but get
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lower salaries.
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, there are some ways to
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the issue by
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the benefits of children who become independent to parents and schools implement some training and increase their wage.
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